1. Tybalt and Benvolio start a street fight.
2. Captain Prince deterrs them.
3. Lady Montague talks to Benvolio looking for Romeo.
4. Benvolio locates him.
5. Romeo discusses with his cousin about Rosalyn and how he loves her but she doesn’t love him back.
6. An illiterate servant stumbles across Benvolio and Romeo.
7. Not knowing he is talking to Montagues, the servant accidentally informs them two about a Capulet family gathering.
8. Romeo finds out that Rosalyn is going , and he makes a note to attend.
9. Lady Capulet tries to convince Juliet to marry Paris.
10.Benvolio and Mercutio convince Romeo to attend a masquerade.
11. Romeo gives in an goes with them.
12.Romeo meets Juliet.
13.Romeo immediately falls in love with her.
14. Juliet discovers a new-found love for Romeo.
15. Romeo tries to hide from passing Montagues, while talking to Juliet.
16. The new couple plan to get married the next day.
17. They get married.
18. Mercutio is killed by Tybalt.
19. Tybalt is killed by Romeo.
20. Prince banishes Romeo.
21. Friar Lawrence tells Romeo to go to Mantua.
22. Romeo visits Juliet before he leaves.
23. He departs.
24. Friar Lawrence sends a letter to Romeo about his plan to stop Paris from marrying Juliet.
25. The letter is held up by a quarantine in a passing town.
26. Romeo hears Juliet is dead but it is a potion that makes her appear dead.
27. He is distraught, and purchases a deadly potion from Apothecary.
28. He travels to Verona secretly.
29. At the apparent wedding, Romeo kills Paris.
30. Romeo sees Juliet ‘dead’ and kills himself.
31 . Juliet wakes up to see Romeo dead; so she kills herself.
January 2, 2015 at 8:14 pm
Esteban, Thug Notes is great! Be careful though. It skips over some important details and is no substitute for actually reading the text.
It’s a great book, once you get to grips with it.
When you are analysing the narrative, try to ensure you also include quotations and analyse the language.
Nice work.
January 25, 2015 at 5:40 pm
Wow, Esteban. This is an horrifically beautiful piece of writing. It is an original response to the task set and uses some vivid imagery that got my blood pumping. Excellent work.
There is work to do, but this is a very strong piece of writing. Mostly, they are to do with your grammar.
Targets:
1) Many of your sentences are too long. Keep them short.
2) Your complex sentences fail to use conjunctions in the correct way. One conjunction per sentence.
3) Your opening could be more gripping. Hook your reader in from the off.
Grade:
35/40 (B1)